Story!

Alright, I have this story called "The Ayon" that I am almost done with. Well, I've finished it, but I'm thinking about rewriting parts of it and stuff. I've been working on it since about April 2006. It's on my FictionPress account, if anyone wants to read it. Here's a segment of it: >"I knew what we were fighting for, what we were riding for. We were riding for freedom, for hope, and for the blood that would be spilt this day. And the blood that would be split everyday from then on, until the very last drop was lost in the dirt, and the very last cry of battle lost in the dawn. True, though none of us would probably be alive on that faithful day, it would come, I knew. And how glorious was that, to know that you had been a part of the ending of all wars, of all destruction? And though it was also true that one could not end fighting by fighting, for neither was it plausible, nor hardly fathomable, a man must stand for what he believed right, and oppose what he knew to be wrong. And, above all, defend those he loved."< What do you think?